The figure gives information about the processes involved in electricity production at a geothermal power plant. Overall, it can be seen that the power production is consisting of five main semens including cold water, the injection well, the production well, condenser, turbine and generator.

At the beginning of the process,  the cold water is pumped down 4.5km into the injection well. In the next stage, the cold water is passed through the geothermal zones also known as hot rocks. As a result, it converted into hot water and then it goes into the production well. Afterwards, the hot water is fed into the condenser for further operations.

Following this, the hot water is turned into the steam with the assistance of the condenser.  In the next phase, the steam is used to rotate the turbine, which is further connected to the generator via a shaft. As a consequence, the mechanical energy is converted into electrical energy. Finally, the generated electricity is distributed to consumers using electric towers and power transmissions lines.

Cambridge IELTS 12 Writing Task 4 Test 1 Evaluation (1)

The figure gives information about the (LINEAR) processes involved in electricity production at a geothermal power plant. Overall, it can be seen that the power (production) (GENERATION) is consisting of five (SEPARATE AND DISTINCT) main (parts) (STAGES) (including) (FROM ) cold water (INFUSION), (DELETE: the injection well, the production well, condenser, turbine and generator.) (UNTIL ELECTRICITY IS CREATED IN THE GENERATOR USING STEAM.)
At the beginning of the process, the cold water is pumped down 4.5km into the injection well. (In the next stage,) (THE) (the) cold water (THEN) is passed through the geothermal zones (also known as)(UNDER THE EARTH WHERE) hot rocks. As a result, (it) (WATER IS) converted into hot water and then it goes into the production well. Afterwards, the hot water is fed into the condenser (for further operations.)
(Following this,) (t) The hot water is turned into (the) steam with the assistance of the condenser. In the next phase, the steam is used to rotate the turbine, which is further connected to the generator via a shaft. As a consequence, the mechanical energy is converted into electrical energy. Finally, the generated electricity is distributed to consumers using electric towers and power transmissions lines. (words: 170)

Cambridge IELTS 12 Writing Task 4 Test 1 Evaluation (2)

The figure gives information about the processes involved in electricity production at a geothermal power plant. Overall, it can be seen that the power production CONSISTS (DELETE is consisting) of five main sections/SEGMENTS COMMA including cold water infusion, the injection well, the production well, condenser, turbine and generator. GOOD

At the beginning of the process, the cold water is pumped down TO 4.5km into the injection well. In the next stage, the cold water is passed through the geothermal zones also known as THE hot rocks. As a result OF IT, THE WATER GETS HEATED AND FURTHER ACCUMULATED TO (DELETE, it converted into hot water and then it goes into) the production well. Afterwards, the hot water is fed into the condenser for further operations.

Following this, the hot water is turned into the steam with the assistance of the condenser. In the next phase, the steam is used to rotate the turbine, which is further connected to the generator via a shaft. As a consequence, the mechanical energy is converted into electrical energy. Finally, the generated electricity is distributed to consumers using electric towers and power transmissions lines.

DESPITE SOME MINOR ERRORS, IT WAS WRITTEN PRETTY WELL

I LIKE HOW YOU EXPRESSED THE CRUCIAL DETAILS USING VOCABULARY

Possible Scores:

Lexical resources = 8

Coherence and cohesion=7

*TA/TR = 8

Grammar (and Trivial Errors) = 6